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Subject: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
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Original Message 1/9 23-Aug-03 @ 09:02 PM - Stuck on this song, need feedback.
Message 2/9 24-Aug-03 @ 03:17 AM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
.>>>hey....sorry...but YOU asked!
mixing sounds very clean!
Message 3/9 24-Aug-03 @ 09:06 AM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
I really like this track, I'm a sucker for that particular piano vibe, and I agree that vocals would be great. Perhaps something a bit stark to contrast the music's production.
This really does seem like a "song" (I'm still listening to it right now) and I think you should treat it as such. I wouldn't lay anything on top of the piano sections, however, because they stand well on their own - simple but effective - and anything that would mask those sections would be unfortunate.
Lyrical content will be key because I think people will be drawn in enough to actually listen to what you (or your lyricist) have to say.
It's a pretty simple track (that's a compliment) and it works, again, as a song. However, don't be afraid to do a bit of rearranging to accommodate lyrics but don't go overboard and lose the plot musically. USE THAT PIANO PART: That is your hook (despite what you may think regarding the build up) but don't just loop the track to get more mileage. Work a "bridge" (truly the hardest part of songwriting) into the arrangement, that will help you back into a position to introduce the piano part one more time.
Like Clay said, "you asked", so FWIW, those are my opinions.
One more thing - find a soulful singer (still listening) but someone who doesn't over-emote, if they don't "feel" that piano part sack 'em.
Okay, one very last thing. you may get comments about 4x4 but don't let it get you down. Like it our not you've got some "classic" elements in there and the beginnings of a catchy pop tune. Vocals, IMO, will make or break what you've already got. Good luck and hope to hear the final result.
Message 4/9 24-Aug-03 @ 11:04 AM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
Piano is way cool, its def a really neat hook. lead at 2:21 should go!
But like the huys say, some vocals would be cool, nice glossy female ones!. You also need to do some stuff with your drums and bass, they get a bit boring.
Good potential... keep going.
G
Message 5/9 24-Aug-03 @ 01:46 PM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
Message 6/9 24-Aug-03 @ 05:48 PM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
Questions:
On the vocal part, i am guessing you are saying like actually someone singing, and not the catchy one phrase lines?
Drum and Bass.. that is one of my musical weakness, I dont really know ways to change up the D and B without it throwin g the track off. Is there a good logical transistion rules for Drums?
Thanks again for the help
Message 7/9 24-Aug-03 @ 06:32 PM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
The begining chords and off beat bass to follow is SO done- massivley fat pad type B&J stuff comes to mind especially.
Omg this is SO blank and jonesish of you! I like it so far
I like the piano as well. I do think it's kinda a waste of a good line on that bass sequence.
Cool pads at the break.
I don't like the lead- its to hirange and sounds like it has way to much resonance. Just use something similar to the piano sequence in a synth sound- that's the strongest point of the track.
Okay now the Main lead came in. You will get slammed for copyright infringement on that. It's nearly the same lead as that single by DJ's @ Work - minus the LAST chord. It's almost the same sound too.
That patch comes in again- its too loud.
YAY! Piano- it's cool.
Track finished.
I'm really sorry to come across as being really harsh, but this track is just done. I've heard nearly everything (EXCEPT the piano) before. Personally, I would drop everything except the piano and start from scratch with that and a new bassline.
But if you don't want to start over, here's what you should do:
Clean up the mix a bit- that resonance lead has too much err resonance and to hirange. Also get rid of the 909 kit. Experiment with some distortion and other types of ed up effects and work to have the punchey "new" trance kit sounds. Also that bass patch is finished- too old sounding. If you want to have an off-beat bassline, get something punchier and definatley louder. Make the bass and the kicks thud more. Try using some panning on your hats etc- makes these style tracks more intersting and fun.
As for vocals, I dunno about verses. Catchy one-liner like you said I think would fit better.
That's all I can really think of, sorry to rag on ya bud but if I didn't want you to get a good track out there, I would tell you it was great ;P
Let us know how the finished product sounds like!
Andrew
Message 8/9 24-Aug-03 @ 06:56 PM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
Thanks again
Message 9/9 26-Aug-03 @ 10:47 PM - RE: Stuck on this song, need feedback.
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